The Myth
We all have to take a stand
In the direction and trials of life
Some of us lean on someone else
Some of us have to face it all alone
Both ways we have to face the struggles of life
Sometimes we even fall in the heaps
Meant to be, there is no escape
At times, certain falls drains out our strength
Standing back becomes a myth
Yet what differentiates one to another is how we take
and face the fall
copyright Nasra Al Adawi 2004
In the direction and trials of life
Some of us lean on someone else
Some of us have to face it all alone
Both ways we have to face the struggles of life
Sometimes we even fall in the heaps
Meant to be, there is no escape
At times, certain falls drains out our strength
Standing back becomes a myth
Yet what differentiates one to another is how we take
and face the fall
copyright Nasra Al Adawi 2004
posted by iamnasra at 12:45 AM
11 Comments:
Dear Nasra, Salam, Regard and reverence to your
apparent and inner greatness, which sometime come out
like a reed , like a ray of hope coming out of caves
of uncertanity. Your own search within yourself will
make your soar higher and higher and it is a matter of
time. let us hope soon you show out more crimson rays
of your layerd and well decoarated personality.But
Ialso most often pray for you. I wanted to derive more
life for my survial from your potential chasm an
apparent charm. Good luck.
Hi Nasra,
Your poem was wonderfully beautiful in all its truth! Your first
and last stanza I particularly liked:
We all have to take a stand
In the direction and trials of life
Yet what differentiates one another is how we take and face the fall
Thank you so much for sharing it!
Smiles,
Patty Apostolides
lovely poem. so true and so well put. you have done brilliantly.
wishing you all the happiness in the coming year.
(Do visit my poetry blog sometime at http://shubhodeep.blogspot.com)
Hi Nasra....the magical vibrance of your words is still resonating in my mind. Wish you a very Happy and fulfilling New Year....may all your Dreams come true.
Nasra, good poem. Nice feelings portrayed. Keep it up.
Insightful thoughts, Nasra. Thanks for sharing. :)
hola que bueno encontrar una persona como tú
eres de Oman, árabe y eres cristiana...me gustaria establecer una comunicación contigo...Hablas español???
sino haremos en intento en ingles!
It's wonderful. Especially when you say, it's not always possible to stand back. How true! Best wishes and warm regards.
Hi Nasra! This is a great theme and you have done it justice!
'Yet what differentiates one to another is how we take
and face the fall.'
So true.
Hi Nasra,
sorry, I missed it before and only discovered it! So I
thought I reply via email instead.
You wrote:
The Myth
We all have to take a stand
In the direction and trials of life
Some of us lean on someone else
Some of us have to face it all alone
Both ways we have to face the struggles of life
Sometimes we even fall in the heaps
Meant to be, there is no escape
At times, certain falls drains out our strength
Standing back becomes a myth
Yet what differentiates one to another is how we take
and face the fall
copyright Nasra Al Adawi 2004
Okay so the above is my poem written in 1994. I agree
write revise and revise ..So here is the poem after I
sat with Enlish Professor Dr. Roscoe from Sultan
Qaboos University. Below is how the poem has been
rewritten
The Standing Myth
We all have to take a stand
In the direction and trials of life
Some of us lean on others
Some of us face it alone
Both ways we face life’s struggles
Sometimes we collapse in heaps
It was meant to be, there’s no escape
Sometimes falls drain our strength
Standing back becomes a myth
What matter’s most is how we face the fall
(So which one do like better)
My response:
I like the second one better: it's trimmer, and thus
the message is sharper, in my opinion. Only thing the
second one needs is some punctuation to make some of
the lines read a little clearer, particularly line 8
"Sometimes falls", I thought it would be clearer to
have a comma in between those two words. Line 5 may be
better if you start off with "In both ways,". Line 7
might have more continuallity if it was started as
"Sometimes, it is meant to be.". Just suggestions. :)
Best regards,
- Liz
Post a Comment
<< Home